Full Critique Portrait tried like studio without much equipment

[saurabh01]

Hi,
This is one of my exciting shoots that open a new genre in my photography. Hmmm portrait and I were not always best friends but slowly doing it in my house. The surprising thing, I don’t have any studio equipment (speed light etc) and have been shoot in darkness and background design has been projected with a craft and flash ( iphone flash) . I used remote to take snaps because I was the model . It was difficult to because every time i was going out of focus and remote don't work.

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[Minor Problem]

It's not really working for me I'm afraid. To me a portrait needs to have some detail of the subject.

 

[saurabh01]

It's not really working for me I'm afraid. To me a portrait needs to have some detail of the subject.

I had a subject face less which i was trying it

 

[Mike Singh]

 

[piersidephotos]

Looks odd, the background does not work. The sharp edges of the hoodie almost looks odd.
I am no pro, but this image does not work for me.